MamaLama95

I love your signature by the way. This poem was so emotional. And beautifully written. There probably were some parts of it that I would change, but if I did, ...

This is quite good - you've got some nice images and so on, except your rhyme scheme is so haywire it could induce an electric current. I'm sorry for the ...

The sea-front. Small and smiling winds stroke us All, upon the hill-top in the April Evening. Orange seeps deep magenta skies It was mainly in these three lines that I ...

This poem had some beautiful imagery, and you made clear what you were trying to put across. I do feel like it's forced in many places, and some of the ...

This was entitle 'Tension', and yet I felt no tension. It's too drawn out and there isn't enough clear imagery. While I think you could make it longer and the ...

This was my favourite line; my fantasy all lined with gold now fogged with black It was a good piece of work - use punctuation though, otherwise it can be ...

You have no idea how grateful I am for your review. To be honest, I have never properly been taught or told how to use correct punctuation in dialogue, so ...

[I wrote this during the protests against the government in Bahrain. It came to me in my head as I began to realize how the entire Arab world had suddenly ...

I understand what you're saying about the rhyme, and like I've said, I'm already looking into that - I wrote this when I was 11 and I didn't have much ...

Very touching, bittersweet - I quite liked this, except in the first ten liens or so, the fact that you use full stops after every line made it too stop-and-starty, ...

I think they're all quite beautiful to be honest. Some of these photos are honestly stunning.

There was an over-repetition of 'terrible eyes'. I can understand using it a couple of times, but you overdid it a little. Aside from that, good, dark, mystical, and very ...

This was pretty good - I haven't seen a sonnet around these parts in too long. Very nice, and I think you've done some great work with imagery too, so ...

I did actually really like this, except the last line. I feel it sort of ruined it a little.

I don't really have much to pick up on here - Ignis' review was hella detailed. The one thing I would make a point of noting is the way your ...