MamaLama95

Powerful, definitely thoughtful and a lot of interesting and compelling imagery. I don't think 'summery' is a word, but I could be very wrong, so I apologize if that's the ...

It's written for a friend who's leaving. It's supposed to send a message of not being afraid to take a step forward in life, but never to forget everything you're ...

Thanks all for the wonderful reviews, I'll consider every critique and I'm grateful for each compliment :)

Alright, I think this is fantastic, but I do have some reservations as to the use of so much enjambment. I don't know, maybe that's just me, but I've never ...

[I hope that wherever everyone else’s worlds take you, you still remember where yours began.] I take a deep breath and my first step A girl in the heart of ...

Very moving poem, however I think you slightly overuse the one word per line thing at the beginning, but apart from that, your grammar and use of punctuation was good ...

Stunning. I've done about ten reviews so far, and this poem was by far the best. Brimming with heart and soul, I love the imagery and the theme sends a ...

This poem has a beautiful image of rejuvenation I think; however, you should revise your use of punctuation and grammar. Exempt from those details, it's a nice idea.

Although I think lad123's reply was bordering on harassment, I will agree with him in the sense that I didn't think this made too much sense. I know it's meant ...

Thanks for the reviews :) Yeah, some of the punctuation was off, I realize now. I probably should have proof-read it more carefully, so I'll make the adjustments - thanks ...

I think it's a great idea for a story; however, I'm going to be picky. Your use of grammar and spelling at times is a little off-putting and it can ...

This story has a great idea, good grammar, and in general is written really well. I do think you could incorporate more fluid description, but that's me being picky. In ...

We were all once in the dark Still and unmoving, Possessed by the losses of our friends Few among us knew, How to help, shield, protect I wanted to learn ...

Thanks so much for the great reviews :) Yes, this is intended for the Kindle contest, so I'm really hoping they'll take the story into consideration. Thanks for the compliment ...

I liked the deep hidden meaning in this poem, but I think it's a little sloppy. You try to use a rhyming scheme, but it just doesn't flow very well ...