MamaLama95

Intimate, sweet, loving; this poem was a perfect execution of the power of love. It really was fantastic, and I think you should definitely keep writing this kind of stuff, ...

Wonderful photographs - I need to get a lens that will let me do macros like this.

It's an interesting idea, but it's poorly executed. You should explore it and expand upon the work, perhaps making it more dramatic and creating more of a build-up. The title ...

I think the length of this was perfectly fine actually - you said you converted it from a story, and it feels that way, but it's wonderful. It has a ...

I think the piece had a lot of potential, but the rhyming wasn't necessary. It felt forced a lot of the time, and it felt like you were stopping and ...

Dark, deep, and with some beautiful wording. I'd work on the meter/flow of the poem, because I lost it at moments when I was reading, but that's about the only ...

The fact that you used hyphons after EVERY line sort of got on my nerves, because it doesn't make sense to me. Work on your use of punctuation and that ...

First piece I've read on here of the sort - very powerful, deep, intimate and emotional. I applaud you for this, because it takes a lot of courage and humility ...

I did like that you restrained yourself with the complex vocabulary a little more this time - it helped make the reader concentrate more on what you wanted to say ...

This was really emotional and powerful, so I'm going to overlook most of my criticisms; however, I can't help but notice that it is very scattered and that takes away ...

This felt horribly forced and fake. I'm sorry, but there's nothing worse for me than forced poetry. I liked some of your one-liners, but a lot of it was cliche ...

Very powerful, although I think the last stanza could definitely be improved - it feels too casual compared to the deep emotional turmoil of the rest of the poem. Although ...

I'm going to assume this was written in a Greek period - you should have made more references to the actual time era, because that would have added a lot ...

There isn't much wrong with this work; however, one point I would make is nto to use the word 'sexy'. I can understand you're trying to reflect public opinion, but ...

I have reservations as to this work. It's original, and you are one of the only people I've ever met that can keep a consistent rhyme scheme, but it's repetitive ...