MamaLama95

Quite a beautiful poem actually. I like the wording and you do a great job making the metaphor flow very well. Keep working.

I did notice the missing words, but I've already rectified that - I simply didn't want to upload the poem all over again. Thank you for all the comments, every ...

Thank you for all the reviews, I appreciate every comment.

I’ve had this thought In the back of my head It’s concrete love, it’s thick as lead With all my change Strange Feels like I’m moving backwards at the speed ...

This was quite a good poem. Aside from the usual nitpicking on punctuation, grammar, etc. I'd say you used a great rhyme scheme that was appropriate to the story - ...

Hello. So, I'll be picky, as my inherently dark and cynical nature requires me to be. It's a good poem. But it's far from perfect. You've taken a very important ...

I can see what story you're trying to portray here, and it's a nice idea; however, I don't think you do it justice. The poem lacks some sort of imagery, ...

[For a friend who never left my side, and didn't know he had someone who would never leave his.] I swear to listen to your every word, Promise to talk ...

I think this is good - you have some nice images in there and they provoke a lot of thought, but leave room for personal interpretation. I'm not too sure ...

I prefer to let the reader have whatever interpretation they wish to - I think that leaves the poem more unchained and open for anyone to relate to. Thank you ...

Overall, I think this was a very beautiful poem - it had a charming lyrical touch to it and you made it quite fantastical, which I enjoyed. Some lines I ...

I quite liked this work, it was an interesting idea and you developed it nicely. I think the poem length was ideal for it's purpose, and you gave it a ...

Personally, I thought the last stanza was the best - beautiful, deep, meaningful, and although it was bordering on cliche, you saved yourself with a clever phrasing. Overall, very nice, ...

Some grammatical errors and punctuation issues, but nothing a proof-read or some editing wouldn't fix. Good idea and presented in an appropriate psychotic manner, if a little underdeveloped.

Refreshing, clear imagery and nice intertextuality. All in all, quite a decent poem, if lacking a little in a good finish - your last line was good, and powerful, but ...