MamaLama95

danipower0204, that was terrible. xD

“We’re going to be late.” “It’s only three; we’ve got forty-five minutes to get there.” “I repeat: we are going to be late.” “Come on, when have you ever been ...

[Again, thanks to anyone still reading. This will be longer than my usual pieces, so keep reading.] The villagers were very welcoming towards the tourists, offering food, water, and various ...

[For anyone still following, thank you.] Viatrix’s head was bouncing off the side of the corroded door as she dreamt on. Her mind was filled with colourful dust, sparkling skies ...

I don't mean to be ungrateful, but I didn't understand your review. You just copy and pasted my work, and half my signature.

[Again, continuation. For anyone still reading this, thank you very much for sticking with it. I'm still developing it and working on it. Thanks for any comments and advice.] Such ...

Beautiful imagery and a wonderful message. You did a truly great job with this one, and I it's my favourite today. One thing I would change is the fact that ...

I think for the way you wrote this poem, it was a little too long. You dragged out some parts, and even though I thought the description was wonderful and ...

You keep misusing 'your' and 'you're'. That bothers me, but my predecessors have shown you were you need to improve on that. Also, I'd really wish you'd used punctuation, because ...

Don't worry about the character - I know who they are, I know what they're about, and I know how they live in the world around them, trust me. I ...

[Continuation. I know you're all going to ask for more about the character, but I'm still trying to get a feel for them and to understand them before I describe ...

Thank you for all the comments. I understand what you mean about the description - I will cut it down slightly, so I have some for later perhaps, but I've ...

[This is the intro to my newest story idea. I just wanted to post it up and see what everyone thought of it. If it's generally liked, then I'll post ...

Interesting emotional turmoil, if a little repetitive and blank. By blank I mean there was no image running through the work, and it was mainly focused on describing things over ...

The fourth line didn't make sense, but I love the repetition of the 'p' sound; it gave it a wonderful popping sound and reminded me of camera flashes for some ...