Maki-Chan

sigh.. I'm sad. There's nothing for me to help you with. Other than a good review of this. Its really great. I just love the way you use the words ...

This is a really nice poem. If you fix the mistakes pointed out it'll be really good. ^_^

this is a really nice poem. But I'm confused- not by your peom but by the fact I have -500 points.

wow, this is really good. There are just a few mistakes though. I’d never seen anyone as handsome as he and I knew I would never see anyone as beautiful ...

1st to point out mistakes and re dos, than my opinion. She sat alone in the plan hospital as she waited for her friend to return with the condition of ...

HUH????? But.....Sigh. Alright, guess this is goodbye. :cry:

WOW! THis was really great. I'm not very good at poetry, so I won't tell you what to do. other than the fact that I loved this ^_^ Keep it ...

Tobi Uzaki- He said nothing in return. Not something comforting or even negative. He just remained silent. Why did it have to happen? Tobi felt incomplete. The link that held ...

Tobi Uzaki- Leon walked to Jessica's body, but stopped. "just leave, don't take anything with you." Tobi threatened. Leon ran away as fast as he could. ************************************************

Shiro- He fell on his bed. Finally he was home. But at the moment he was alone. His "Father" was at work and his little sister was still at school.

Tobi Uzaki- He didn't look at Leo. "Just leave." Tobi told him.

Raph- The class continued, it was frickin boring for Raph. But "Cleo" seemed to enjoy it. But he did enjoy spending time with her. She was quiet most of the ...

Raph- In science class, Raph seat was next to her's. He enjoyed the luck he had. It was AWSOME! This girl was hilarious. Sitting next to her, she flintched. Raph ...

:shock: GASP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm scared. Ryro-son please put this into smaller parts. I wanna review this, but I don't know if I can. To attract other readers and maybe even reviewers, ...

Raph- The girl he looked at, gave him a dirty look. He stuck his tongue at her. She looked away from him. Raph just giggled. She was a funny one. ...