Maki-Chan

not bad. I liked it. ^_^

I liked it all but the end. Its just to straight foreward. Can you change it?

Ume Udaro- Ume and Gatame had went inside after the light had left the sky. Ume was still looking for Kaku. "Udaro-sempai?" Gatame asked. "Yes?" Ume said. "What do you ...

I liked this alot. If you correct the stuff the others put before, your poem will be awsome!!!!!! ^_^

*What is the plot, i didn't catch it.*

Shiro- He increased his speed to the next town- Sendai. A small town mostly of black smiths and farmers. Sam had rushed towards the nearest woods. Shiro smiled. "Interesting."

Sora- "I am Sora, a fox."

Name: Tom Hill age: 16 gender:male personaltiy: he is fun and loving. Is happy and caring. Will protect those he can. appearance: occupation: he is a student- anverage joe history: ...

Haimon- viola appeared in her house. Haimon was sitting on the couch. "Hey, what are you doign inside of my home with out my permission?!" Viola questioned him. Haimon stood ...

Shiro- He yawned, totally asleep. Then a girl walked over to the tree- it was shin. She knelt down and looked and Shiro. She blushed. "Wow, he's handsome." She whispered ...

*Yeah, Timmy if you read my long post with Ume and Gatame, you;d know your part.*

Sora- The fox girl waited in the pub with the other two- Senda and (Can't find the other's name). Sora had a beer in her hand. She chugged it down ...

*no one wantst to talk with my dude- you can call him Shiro for short.*

woops, sorry. Too lazy to delete to many posts.

*Ok*