Maki-Chan

Ume Udaro- She looked around there were Hollows everywhere. "Crap this isn't good," Just then a huge dragon of ice roared while it flew into the sky. "Histugaya!" Ume realized.

*Just picture the hollow like a monster wearing a mask.* " Aoi shed from the light, Akane arise from the darkness!" Ume shouted. Her sword split in two and transformed. ...

Ume Udaro- she didn't stick around for the doctor. Ume quickly left the room. She jumped onto the roof and sat down staring into the sky. In the distance a ...

Well I think it was pretty good. ^_^ decisions may be tough. This part didn't make sense with the rest. BUt it might just be me. OTher wise I really ...

well it wasn't too bad. the ending was alright. I give it a 6.5/10.

nice job- I see nothing wrong with it. It was awsome!!!!!!!!! ^_+^_^_^_^_^_^_^__^^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^_^__^^__^_^^_^__^^__^^_^ Well done. 10/10

* Naomi is alive, umm well not really dead- but she doesn't remember Sirith and the others* Haimon- There before him wa Naomi- a girl who had forgotten all of ...

Ume Udaro- She had drifted asleep, and a nightmare pleaged her dreams. " My, daughter. You are nothing but a monsterous burdan on life- only meant to destroy it. I ...

Haimon- Just then his cellphone rang. He answered it. "Hello?" "Haimon, when are you coming back? I'm so bored out here. There's nothing but happyness and no pain- its boring." ...

*Umm lunabuna the wagon just tipped over.*

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Sora- The wagon unfortunatly tipped over, and the nobles surounded those inside. "We have no chose, fight or die." Sora told Sam.

I think your first Idea was a good one ^_^

Thanks Rose, if killTheZobie (timmy) hurries up the next chapter should be soon.

Ume Udaro- Arriving at the medical center in the center of the 'Pure Souls'(Its where the soul reapers live), Haru placed Ume on the chair. "Get better, ok?" Haru said ...