Maki-Chan

I rather liked this one. Its form is interesting and intreaging. I give it a 8.5/10. Well done.

not bad. ^_^

Shiro- "Hmm, 15. Wonder who it'll be." Shiro wondered.

Shiro- He didn't know why he was even coming. But now he was late, just arriving at Sam's house. ding dong Sam opened the door to see a short white ...

not bad, but it doesn't really make to me. What is it about?

now I like this much better than the first. ^_^ Can't wait to read more.

Maki- She walked in the empty road, searching. Wondering endlessly, for one man. One man who took away everything from her. As she walked throught the town, people watched her. ...

Ume Udaro- Ume walked through out the streets, no one seeing her. WAlking through people. Searching for the other half of the key. "HEY! What are you doing?" A man ...

Tobi Uzaki- "This sucks. Maria's kidnapped, we're separeated from Amber, Jacin and Jared. Now crazy were-cats are after me and Jessica." Tobi moaned. Jessica could barely hear his words, as ...

Shiro- "We are heading to somewhere safe." Shiro answered her. He fly high into the sky, holding onto Nagame tightly.

Haimon- He awoke to see Naomi sleeping next to the bed. He smiled. Gently placing his hando n her head.

*Note to self- relax with commas* thanks for your awsome reviews. I am still working on chapter 2. But it'll get here, and you'll be proud, of how great it ...

name: Haimon (Greek for bloody) age: 17 gender: male nationality:trojan personality:serious and mature, bold but kind. Has a temper history: parents wre killed in the trojan war, but he escaped. ...

Shiro- He didn't know how he got dragged into this. Going to a party at Sam's house. A girl he barely new. But the only reason he come was because ...

thank you ^_^ this brought me new insperation.