Makeeda

THIS IS EPIC! Beautifully told, I love how you translated the song into a story perfectly, I cant wrong it well done! I hope to see more. :)

Hey very nicely written, the poem flowed nicely. I especially like the last stanza, seemed almost hypnotic. Keep it up :)

Thank you AmethystNight and captaindomdude, both your criticisms are extremely appreciated. I have always had issues with punctuations and I'll definitely work on it, you both are the first ever ...