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This might be a little hard to believe... but your readers don't want a ton of description. It's much better to only get a few general details about a character ...

Hey Tenyo! Interesting story. It almost reminds me of the horror movie "The Village," with the unknown monsters lurking in the woods and the children forbidden to go near the ...

Hey Ranger! Another great chapter. It wasn't quite as amusing as the other sections, but Jot is still very funny. “Oh my, this isn’t going in the direction of incest, ...

This is the first chapter of my NaNoWriMo novel. :D Even if the old wall hadn’t served as a very clear boundary line, I would have known the instant I ...

Hey Blue! I really liked your story. I don't know why no one else has critiqued it yet, because it's quite good. From what I've seen, definitions of flash fiction ...

Hey Ranger! I read the first chapter of the story but couldn't find much that hadn't already been covered by the other reviewers, so here I am! He stared up ...

Hey Frayed! Cool story. The title sparked my curiosity right away. I must still have one foot on the other side because the bathtub I’m lying in feels like pins ...

Hey GrenadeCatcher! Cool story. I thought it was interesting. There are a few things that I noticed while I was reading it, however. It was really loud, but he didn’t ...

Hi birchermuesli! I really liked this story. I did notice a few minor things that could be fixed, though. She could vaguely make out two black hooded figures step out ...

The Shining freaked me out, too. Just the idea of your own father trying to kill you is disturbing. I think "It" by Stephen King was also pretty disturbing. There's ...

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