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Re: Some new stuff from the band 'Disturbed'.
I was disappointed. The song is not a new release--it is merely an old song redone to be released on the new album. However, this does not change the fact ...
Mar 22, 2008 -
Re: Cabbage
Hello again, Pinata. As always, a largely stylistic critique--if something I have written does not ring true, as the writer you have every right to disregard it. The beginning of ...
Mar 22, 2008 -
Re: Eyes
Hello, Pinata. As always, most of my critique is purely stylistic, so if anything does not ring true to you, feel free to disregard. Your first paragraph is a fine ...
Mar 22, 2008 -
Re: Amelia Everline
Hello, Kyte. If I'm not mistaken, all of my suggestions are purely stylistic, purely personal opinion. Feel free to disregard if they do not ring true to you. Initial impressions: ...
Mar 22, 2008 -
Re: mmm...shiny :)
Extremely impressive. Color, contrast, lighting effects...all very professional. The color choice and the vividness of the Mountain Dew ad are very, very appealing. Nicely done. -ME
Mar 19, 2008 -
Re: Humans, Not Gods
That was a rather crass remark, Mike. I believe that he means, Thanatos, is that in order to enable your reviewers to more easily read your work, you should double ...
Mar 19, 2008 -
Re: Hands
If you are looking to add another hand, a larger one, I suggest bringing it in from the lower right area of the piece, for their seems to be more ...
Mar 19, 2008 -
Re: Anime picture I drew on paint shop pro
The color and shading in this look very professional; something you would see in an anime. However, the actual line-art could use some work. The pose is bland, the arms ...
Mar 19, 2008 -
Re: =
Hello, Absynthe. Forgive me if my reviewing method is rather....methodical, but I prefer details to the larger picture. I will, of course, give you my overall opinion at the end ...
Mar 19, 2008 -
Re: Who or What is SPEW?
Admission Process Entry into SPEW is done through an intense nomination process. SPEW looks at a sample critique and story by the nominee, as well as how they participate on ...
Aug 31, 2007 -
Re: God. (renamed from Strength and why I dont have much of it)
Disclaimer--this critique is purely stylistic. If you agree with the comments, use them. If not, do NOT take my opinion as law. On to the critique. ^_^ God has made ...
Aug 31, 2007 -
Re: Match Maker
I am not big on arranged matches. In the case of Crysi, however, I will make an exception. ^_^
Aug 30, 2007 -
Re: The Edge Of A Straight Razor (First Three Parts)
Merely as a stylistic point--Your dialogue, to me at least, detracts from the story. Both the manner in which it is written, and the words themselves, are rather broken. As ...
Aug 29, 2007 -
Re: Would you buy a YWS Stuffed Monkey?
Yes, of course. I will do anything I can to contribute to the website.
Aug 29, 2007 -
Re: A Shift in Power
OOC: Great concept. I think the groups will clash, creating tension with the writers, but it could be fun. I will give it a chance, for my first storybook. Name: ...
Aug 29, 2007
