Madhatter66

Reminds me of the movie called "Serenity" :)

Is this story sopposed to be a spoof? the ending kinda made me think this hehe. Well if your trying to make this story seem serious I think you should ...

It seems like a trusting story, you have promise in your skill at a writer, but you need to develop your story much more so that it keeps the reader ...

It wasn’t always like this, I had a normal life, you know what I mean, a beautiful wife and daughter and a house just on the border of the motherland, ...

Can i get some C&C from people please

The sun gazed upon the still waters. I sat there, on the water’s edge, fixing my wrinkled eyes on the beams of broken light that reflected from the river that ...

I agree with emotion_less, don't keep the very beginning unless life depends on it

Awwww thats pretty good, just some parts lack feeling and emotion, but overall its good. Keep up the good work :wink:

Hey People, my name is Josh but you can call me Hatter everybody else does hehe. I am a short story writer, that enjoys writing disturbing, horror stories for all ...