Madhatter66

i will start my introduction on saturday, as I am working on a new story right now can't wait to get started thanks for the correction Eclipse. hehe

Character profile: Name: Cross Centa Age: 24 Race: Zabrak Home Planet: Iridonia Affiliation: Sith Class: Sith Master Lightsaber color/description: Cyan, Cross Centa wields duel light sabers, which can

This piece of writing lacks in true emotion of the main character, you are speaking too much as if it was your own experience, and your language and style used ...

I really like that last line.

Its good you realise that, just don't complain on something thats simple to understand, anyway HAPPY HALLOWEEN and all that are reading this check out the art section as I ...

the eyes closing is an action that is taking place while he is thinking, I didn't add it to the paragraphs ot ir would be confusing but if you really ...

Wow this is really good, though J.Haux is right it doesn't look like her and your shadowing on her left side looks like Brad Pitt just gave her a shiner. ...

This is my short biography of when i met my last girfriend and after a year found out she had cheated on me all this time for some guy who ...

You know what....when i first wrote this story I always hated the intro because it sounded to descriptive, and I kept telling myself this. I think from now on I'm ...

This is a very unique story you have come so far with and I really like it just i keep thinking that your character's line seem like they are talking ...

This is a very good description but some reason it doesn't pull me in, might be your language but the beginning line of each stanza in the versus when put ...

Spooky story but no feeling of rage that this guy felt

Nice work and I like the title

Someone needs a visit from the grammar fairy :wink:

To cut it short my idols are Terry Pratchett, Niel Gaimen, Ben Temple Smith, and Steven Niles 8)