MadameX

First I love your poetry. That is both a compliment and an apology for my review being so short, since I just don't have a lot to add. The one ...

This is really good so far. I'm not much of a reviewer of this kind of poetry, but I do think you could add emphasis by changing the line "I ...

120,000 words is a really big novel, somewhere on the lines of an epic fantasy. YA is usually 60-75,000, romance is around there, mystery is 70-90,00 and both fantasy and ...

Tanks for both comments. I think about half these problems are explained in the next segment (a folly of having to break up the text to make it a readable ...

For once, I don't have a single bad thing to say. This was really, really good. I even liked the lack of capitals, as it projected the sheer anger of ...

I like your minimalist approach here. No unnecessary metaphors or purple language, just straight words, and it really works well. There's a lot of character packed into a small space. ...

As the others said, I haven't a clue what this is about, but it sounds great still. This will sound completely weird, but this poem reminds me of Cory Doctorow's ...

You have an excellent rhythm here. The lines bounce beautifully, especially "I’ve been so long without a love song" with it's neat syllable count and interior rhyme, and "Subconcious pillowtalk" ...

Mercedes Garcia-Marquez crouched behind a row of trash cans, her back against the slimy wall of a tenement building. A high-pitched whine from the street told her that there were ...

This is a nice little poem. I'd like to know what book it is related too, since it could probably answer some questions that the poem raises. Some of the ...

There are a lot of poems on YWS where repetition and rhyme become silly, cheesy, or lessen the impact of the piece. Not here. You are certainly in control of ...

First off, excellent use of meter here. I can tell you payed good attention to word choice by the even syllables. However, I was a bit disappointed to see that ...

This was a good start to a poem, but I definitely think it could use some improvement. For starters, there is no reason for night and air to be capitalized. ...

The main character of my story lives in futuristic India. She's the last Kumari Devi , which is a tradition where a young girl is chosen as a reincarnated goddess ...

We discussed this indepth recently in my English class, and the conclusion was this: While Yahoo Answers and Wikipedia are acceptable starting sources (meaning you get basic information from them ...