MadameLuxestrange

Hey there! I thought that this was a really emotional piece. I loved the beginning; it fits perfectly for a couple who will never see each other again. My only ...

Hi there! Alright, I really liked your story line. There were some questions I had though. Why is Stella disguising as a man? Are women not allowed to be mages? ...

Hey there! This story was extremely cute. I don't know, but I think that the part about her dad was somewhat irrelevant at that moment. Maybe add in something that ...

Hey there! I'm going to have to agree with Warriorprincess on this, this was good! I thought that you used the different styles of music well to describe someone. Keep ...

Hey there! Awesome job! The only grammatical error in here was a typo where you forgot the 'W' at the end of Yellow. The only story issue is the second ...

Hey there! You said that this was a new style of writing for you. I agree with Wondergirl, this was really well done. I seriously think that you should do ...

Hey there! All I can say is 'Wow!' This poem was brilliant. It had very nice flow to it and the emotions are easily felt. Keep up the great writing! ...

AAAAAAAHHHHH! This was great! I loved the extra part you added at the end. Write an expansion after the end of this one. I want to know what happens next! ...

Hey there! Again, this is beautiful writing. The only thing that I can come up with to get rid of or fix in this piece is what Jasmine Hart said ...

Hey there! This is probably the 12th time I've read your story before I commented on it. I love, love, love this story! It has such great raw emotion and ...

Hey! I really enjoyed reading this. I think you had Julie down perfectly... she reminds me of Clementine from 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind' only she's a little meaner. ...

Hey there! First of all, this is an incredible story and you should definitely expand on it! I thought that the topic you picked was very emotional and it brings ...

Okie-dokie guys, here's my expansion. My sincerest apologies that it took so long to get out; between my homework and my evil parents taking my computer away from me, I've ...

Bonjour sister dear! Okay, first off, this story is extremely well developed. I do agree with Lightplusdark regarding the setting description; you need to describe the people there and the ...

Hey!!! Okay, here's my review: I though I could survive anything Just fix that typo and your grammar should be all set. Now, for the story portion: This poem was ...