MadHatter

Dargon's heavy eyes slowly opened. He growled and flung himself to the ground. "I'll rip open your guts before you can even blink." He swung his heavy fist without looking ...

wow...that was good, yet it didn't really tell what happened (though you can only assume that she died) Otherwise I didn't see any problem with it. Good going and keep ...

"Okay. I suggest that we get started as quickly as possible." Peter leapt down and headed for the door. "Woah there little guy." Greg picked him up. "Shut up. You ...

"Okay...anyone want to come look for fire wood with me?" Dagoon smiled. "Oh...I think we'll just take a rest." Bella yawned. "That wasn't a question. Someone needs to come." He ...

"Well, I'm not an expert, but this dissaperance of our mother, and the earthquakes and all. I'd say someone's causing trouble. Double trouble. Ha...I made a joke! Don't you get ...

Dargon's mind was filled with hate and worry. Where was he now? Who was carrying him? Was this the work of the Preacher, whoever the hell he was? God he ...

Dagoon noticed a switch in Bella's behavior. She was acting funny. Very funny. She was on to him. He couldn't afford her knowing about his plan. Such was the way ...

I liked your piece Kal, though I know that you'll never put any other continuations on here so why bother even reading it?

"I don't like the looks of that Dagoon character." Bella was talking to Senna. He had been ovely friendly and was being to happy to show the way. "Well, he's ...

Like all of your Break Neck stories Jake, you lacked sensory details. You also need to lenghthen your piece for a full effect. I hope you still continue this piece, ...

Dargon fell in a heap under the big man's weight, which was nothing compared to his own. He smiled as the big man's blood fell across his face. It was ...

I'm not an artist but I really liked your halloween dude. Your armoured dude just lacked the realistic stuff (or at least in my opinion it did.)

"What do you intend to do to him?" Lethero quickly blurted. He was trying to burn time. "I have plenty of things I could use him for. Testing drugs, meat, ...

Okay Jake, I didn't think you'd do it but you did. You wrote another Break Neck. Don't write anymore unless you intend to make them better. They lack character development ...

I agree with you Kal. Jake's piece had a good topic but sucked punctuation wise and in reality. Why would these people do such stupid things and why haven't the ...