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Hey Amelia, it's looking good at the moment. I like the Ms Mills character that you've brought in, don't know why really - she has personality. She wore no frivolities; ...

Thanks to all of you, your opinions are much appreciated.

In each man doth cupid sits poise, stringing his bow, singing, though inaudible his voice. For long ago was his body done in, now flies he in spirit, name's now ...

Woe, surging like some misbegotten wave, Wrenchingly ripping the limpets Of Sanity; Insanity’s slave, That clung to the craggy surface. Torturously tearing through my mind, Self Doubt jams into the ...

It's nice and I can see that you're way of dividing it up is effective - that sort of thing isn't really something that I like but I can see ...

The Battle of Cannae - Hannibal versus the Romans. I think it was about 50, 000 on 90,000. I vaguely remember that Hannibal used some tactic which allowed him to ...

I'm dittoing The Abhorsen Trilogy, Harry Potter and His Dark Materials. Other than that I think that Farseer Trilogy By Robin Hobb deserves to be on the list.

I want to jump off a mirror into a pit of shadow Where dust is dawn and light is dark. The sky is clouded by disparate, A conscious decision by ...

Yes, I think that sounds better. :)

I really like it, it's nice, simple and the rhythm that you use (4 syllables, I think) works nicely and allows your poem to flow really well.

It's nice in a simplistic way, I'm not really into the more nature related poetry. Trees seem to be a recurring object in them. Like leaves are many, tree is ...

I’m always on the outside Looking in. Skirting the edges Slipping in between the shadows Unnoticed. The second last line there is a little long and it sort of throws ...

Hey lil, nice to have you here. :)

I liked the content but the overlapping lines was a bit disconcerting. It flowed really well because of it but it came across as a bit prose like, because most ...

A set rhythm would be using some sort of meter for every line. You could use something like iambic pentameter (the most well known one, Shakespeare and most older poets ...