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Hey Amelia, I like the concept and the well overall content of your poem but at times it doesn't quite sound like poetry, it's a bit simple. More recounting than ...

I like the generally flow of the poem, I think that you've done well with the rhyme structure of the villanelle. The line "Oh Love, my Lord, be brave." doesn't ...

Wow, thats true, I totally forgot about it when I wrote it. I will re write it and if I do it in time I'll re submit it. Thanks for ...

I like the rhythm of the poem and the couplet you have on the second and fourth lines, when I was reading over it put emphasis on the ending. It ...

Not plain at all but perfect is used a bit too much to be effective each time. They peopled books and starred in sitcoms, perfect in their lack of effort ...

The feeling I get from the first three lines is really strong, the words make everything surreal and important. The "Glancing" and how they look opposite ways makes me feel ...

Untitled was a working title, I decided to call it "Age". Does that sound right to you guys? Two people out to do only their best - good point Amelia. ...

Thanks before_umbrellas, I was pretty happy with the word choice in the first two stanzas especially, it took quite a bit of time. The chirping of the birds, I was ...

Thanks for the comments Amelia and something euclidean, I'd kind of forgotten about this poem. Also, "Lying in the garden of my mind" didn't sound quite right to me; the ...

The starting description in the second part, the description of the colours of the painting is really well done. The way that you do describe the colours and the way ...

Introduction is nice, I get a good look at Phyllis and the way you describe him is interesting. "Burning obsession" - Nice touch. It was hard to say who was ...

Well it is hard for me to critique if I am sure of the content. The start appears a bit vague to me, especially the second line. It doesn't really ...

It's a book a friend gave to me and I didn't really think that I'd like it but well, I was impressed. I haven't quite finished yet, a hundred pages ...

I see that you are going for effect, the short lines, the more graphic images but I don't really feel anything when I read it. I didn't feel any empathy ...

I like the tone of the poem, when I read it the lines seemed slow and methodic, not savouring each detail but presenting each part without haste. I'm not sure ...