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The way that you have punctuated the piece is effective. Taking your first stanza: Praise fish tanks, giving a nice visual way of forgetting him, (also praised) dying in the ...

I'm caught in two minds. The rhyme and rhythm are interesting and quite clever. In the first stanza: It glares into the corn ers , 7 thrusting their contents into ...

his days are numbered in the crash-course direction tracked down and censored through the beaten screen he's found no solace in displays of affection his quality learnings are bound to ...

As I watched you, As you watched them, I thought of the bare Patch of skin near your Hip-line and the breasts beneath The shirt. While you, (while you) You ...

It stretched the length of life, an epitaph to thoughts. A monument to ingenuity that scaled the clouds Of luminescent glory – A gentle culler of the land and redoubt ...

First of all, I'd like to say a thank you to those of you who critiqued the last poem that I posted, Woe. Your comments were much appreciated and I ...

I posted a slightly different version of this quite a while back, it is slightly edited and far from completely finished. Any and all thoughts are appreciated. Woe, surging like ...

Pearly tears course down her face And fine hair flaunts across her back. The wintry smile fades from her mouth, Pinch cheeked, red and blushing. Tenderness ghosts my features Forever, ...

Simple yet with a hidden meaning. I can't really comment or make any criticisms it's too short to do that. All I can say is that it's very similar to ...

Thanks everyone for your comments, they are much appreciated. I'll see what I can do to improve it. I'll definitely fix up the syllable differences so that it flows a ...

Definitely was original and very easy to read - once I got into the main body of the story. Your beginning is overly descriptive and that really chokes up some ...

Much better. I think that version 2.1 is a real improvement. Flows really nicely.

This, I think, though I am not absolutely sure, is a poem by John Montague an Irish poet who was born in Brooklyn. Why keep doing it?

It's nicely written, it really does create a dark feeling and dark imagery. In the first stanza you have a really good rhythm - I'm not sure if it is ...

Wow that is really good... But did you actually write it? Because I found the exact same poem by Derek Mahon, called the exact same thing, A disused Shed in ...