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An overlooked small seed at best, planted subtlety in my chest, slowly growing, I not knowing. I'd suggest some sort of stronger punctuation before "I not knowing", make it more ...

Just edit this, please. Proper spelling, proper punctuation all that unimportant stuff.

I agree with what Vernon said. Consider narrowing your focus here - you seem to be saying so much about so many things that, well, I get lost in what ...

I think you need to consider more carefully what it is that you are trying to convey in your poem. The first line for example, The night of 18 falling ...

The problem with having a poem completely rhyming and more so in rhyming couplets is that you are often forced to forsake meaning in the search for something that rhymes. ...

It was pretty good - some of the imagery was nice and the ending provided a good finish. swirling around me in a crescendo of greys and faded greens, lifting ...

It was a peaceful, silent, autumn day. The leaves were abandoning their homes and gently gliding to the ground. The birds were chirping as they left their nests to fly ...

Considering that you are attempting to write upon a very written topic you really need to spend a greater amount of time considering the various pitfalls associated with those topics, ...

Title influenced by Wilfred Owen's Anthem for Doomed Youth? I agree with TimJim77, the capitals are annoying. First off I find the repetition of the same ending ("ight", "art" and ...

I understand you may feel this way but as a poem this wasn't very original at all. The imagery was weak - the strongest description probably was "crumbling down" or ...

Ah, okay - that makes things clearer. I've read parts of The Waste Land and I had read the translation of the epigraph but didn't make the connection. So would ...

I quite liked it. The narrative moved forward rhythmically, everything was nicely phrased and had a good ring to it. The boatman, star and the voice are difficult to understand. ...

Thanks for the reviews - The yes' do have a meaning, probably to vague or obscure to anyone but me or someone thinking similarly. It was an idea I borrowed ...

I didn't like this too much. Your topic, love thats not meant to be, leaves a whole mass of potential descriptions or methods for presenting it but the descriptions in ...

Let’s lie in fields of feline flowers 9 where the blades pierce and the whiskers tickle— 10 ........There, can you be free? 5 where the air is too black to ...