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Too many farewells. This is all rather unimaginative. You have some sort of meaning, granted, Farewelll those who died in the name of peace and in the name of war ...

I liked the final stanza and some of the second and third. I don't suppose you've ever heard the song "Let The Drummer Kick" by Citzen Cope? It comes across ...

This really just makes me want to applaud. The lexical choice is superb. The imagery is great and you have a clear direction as to what it is that you ...

I didn't actually realise there were squares in the poem until I recently read over it. They're em-dashes, I copied it from word so it must be a formatting problem. ...

First off, is it without punctuation for a poetic purpose? (I see commas but no full stops) "in-rhythm inhalation" sounds slightly strange I'm not sure exactly if it works; The ...

This doesn't go anywhere. There is a very limited amount of interest that someone can afford to a description of ships. A story about ships fighting? Yes sure. An interesting ...

Freeze my blood till I have rose-red wood in my veins: Blood they say is the thought of the brain. Place me in ice and exorcise that Sylvan Beast. Yet, ...

This seems to be mainly a nostalgic recollection. There isn't much in terms of emotive description. I mean, what is there in this that makes me care about this? Or ...

Abstract, thunderous creatures of tempestuous oceans and stinging fires intertwined To start off, here, I think your somewhat too wordy and I'm not so sure as to whether you're generalizing ...

It's original which for me practically ensures some level of enjoyment. Okay to start: two grammatical things. With a knife I can peal skin, remove veins, Should that be "peel". ...

I don't know. I'm not inspired or even really questioning. Entitled "Questions Arise!" I expected the questions which were to arise would either be more reader accessible or the poem ...

It was pretty and pretty good. I just felt it was lacking a really effective ending. ‘Come with me, love- come with me!’ " 'Come with me, love' " I ...

It's an interesting style and I like it. However, it comes across somewhat like an acrostic. A is for ... B is for ... Maybe mix it up a bit ...

It's nicely simple and what's said is nicely expressed but well, is much being said? It comes across as a simple retelling. I hurt you, I don't regret it, I've ...

I remember the day perfectly. I was sitting in my biology class, half listening to Mrs. Colons speak. Basically I was just writing song lyrics in the margin of my ...