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That first stanza He has a window with no glass, a ceiling with no beams, a sky made out of canvas. Is really very good I think that it captures ...

It's a beautiful poem. I can't really suggest much for it, just point out some bits that I really liked. What do you remember most? she asked. Sex, I said, ...

It's a fairly good poem, it doesn't really have any standout descriptions or words which really would draw my attention. the words of which you define, I'm a bit puzzled ...

I think that you should consider the use of stanzas when you are writing, I think that this poem in several stanzas would work better than it does as it ...

First of all thanks Miya, I'm glad that you liked it and thanks Claudette for your suggestions. I'm pretty sure that I'll fix up the rhythm, the middle stanza was ...

I don't quite understand how Posideon, aftering having faded away because he was shunned by non-believers would produce and heir who would be so infinitely powerful. The poem sets up ...

Providentially, he was potentially, Enamoured by the glamour Of his near flawless stammer, Till the words he spun changed, substantially. Sneeringly the lies were spat from his tongue, Conjuring long ...

The content of the poem is good - I don't think that using couplets was the best choice. The rhyme becomes a bit too obvious and it detracts from the ...

It's a nice descriptive poem, and I get the feeling of swaying from your line structure and rhythm - but at times I don't see the point of certain line ...

It's a very nice emotional piece. The first stanza and the use of questions and repetition works well. The questions draw the reader in while the repetition helps to build ...

The first stanza is very descriptive. How can such a place ever have been graced by whom i adore'd. I like this line, its unexpected and very direct. I descend ...

Very nice, the rhyme works well and is very good. I like the "your smell burns me to the soul" - it is an effective choice of words. In the ...

My pleasure, thank you for your reply to my poem. I appreciate the punctuation and grammar advice. I'll fix it up now. Thanks. :)

Nice poem, I like the secluded metaphor. I now see that it does work very well. I also like the ending, it is very potent.

First of all I would like to say this is a very well written piece of fantasy. “Surrender!” his magically enhanced voice was heard by all. I think you need ...