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you're right, Dark Angel. That flows much better. I'll be editing that now. I'll think about adding a few more lines, but it might be hard. Anyways, thank you for ...

Another poem by me... I've been really bored, and I've done quite a few reviews, so I've decided to write a few poems. --------------- Sometimes I feel like nothing is ...

I'm just writing this poem as I go, so it might not be too amazing, but still. I appreciate any reviews and any corrections anyone has to offer! ------------- I ...

I don't understand anything in this story. I'm sorry to be harsh, but what in the world were you thinking? It could be SO much better! Where did the knife ...

Okay, I'll give an overview at the end. Bold are spelling mistakes/grammatical errors. Italics are just me pointing things out. [s]Strikethroughs[/s] are words that shouldn't be there. Befor before la

Wow! I really enjoyed this! Here are a few... suggestions. This messes up the whole rhyming scheme. Try to make all of the rhyming schemes the same. You did doubles ...

What is this poem about? Chapped Eating the dandruff scabs off my head my eyes are watering from nonexistent onions or emotions always there is a pipe cleaner constricting my ...

I would do a full review of this thing, but it is already fairly good. Though there is one thing: I don't understand what it is talking about. This poem ...

Hey Deathcab4love! Welcome to the forums. I only joined like... maybe a half a month ago? Or a week ago? I'm not really sure. So, this site is pretty amazing. ...

Sorry if I sound mean. I'm a perfectionist. Bold things are suggestions of words to add. Italics are words that I spoke about in the little explanation above each quote. ...

Okay, I guess I'll do an entire review (I write in bold): His feet dragged change this word. Maybe change it to: "His feet scraped against the freezing concrete floor" ...

Sara, I thank you a TON for your help. I guess it's just hard to write about something so close to heart. I want to point out one thing to ...

You think it's too repetitive? I guess it is. At the time that is what I was going for. Repetitiveness emphasizes key points in a story. Maybe it is a ...

Did you mean for this to be in italics? [i] You changed from past to present tense. The sun was hiding behind the clouds, it was too incredible to be ...

Thanks everyone, that really helped. Nope, I have no more questions. If I think of anything I will post it here for sure, though. Seeya later & thanks, -Macs