MRMarathon

the rhythm in my head makes it go swell. the vultures and tyrants represent evil in our society of men and vultures. the oppressors. the swarming.../vanishing is a method of ...

despite the critique on the line breaks i think it flowed beautifully otherwise. i think the thing you have right is the second stanze which i like.

very enticing, emotional and gripping. realistic. i like it. everyone else has covered what i would say so i thought i'd say the wonderful things.

that was like beautiful. i think this is perfect for the kind of audience it's for imaginative and fun. it's got a certain thrill to it also.

you have the best kind of silliness. i think it would be great for kids to read or something like that.

aw thanks i suppose. i hope to see ya'll around. that's the best welcome i've had in ages.

i would think it would be interesting to read it as a play of some kind. the dialogue moves it along very well but sometimes it would help if it ...

it's all abstract as i've said before. i'm more of an experimental poet. the woman in the poem is decribed as tanning for beauty from a tanning bed but the ...

i work from abstract imagery and made up metaphors. it's not all random it's connected in one way or another. it's about illusions of lust and glamor. it's not supposed ...

I thoroughly enjoyed the style and abrupt fiction style. it reminds me of a noir type film. i think it should be a film if you think that would be ...

I would say if you're going to have dialect you should incorporate it from the beginning. I agree with all of the above with the "ing" thing and some parts ...

Hi, I'm the new guy here. I posted a couple of things. Uhm, about me. I'm in college and I have a self-published book. I've been writing for a few ...

alas and be aghast, poor women for i am a sad and lonely actor set across the corpses of crippled hearts, dripping across the pages of your soul infested letters ...

one thousand half loves lying on a beach spread open thighs defecated by the horrid leeches a dove flies above a violent sunset and passes out drunk in the sand ...

Deposit one man into a woman's throat watch red mucous spill out, convulse and fire dangerously into pupils "i am the mark of resistance" yells out the one legged soldier ...