Lyrical

Hey, thanks to both of you, I know what you mean. This actually started life as a piece of prose! I wasn't sure if it worked that way, so I ...

Umm, ok, this was based on what I thought was a pretty good concept, but I'm not sure if I managed to do it justice. I always seem to come ...

OK, now it's in the right place I hope! A Shortcut To The Sea The velvet-soft Quiet Of Night. My skin thrills At the touch of Chill wind. Steep steps ...

I'm not going to be very helpful, cos I couldn't see much wrong with that. It's a really good beginning idea for a novel. It draws you in, and I ...

OK, I just sat down and wrote this, cos I was feeling a bit frustarted. I think it helped me feel better, but I'm not sure if it works. It's ...

My favourite albums are: Bright Eyes - I'm Wide Awake, It's Morning/Fevers And Mirrors - can't decide which I prefer! Brilliant lyricist The Shins - Chutes Too Narrow - Amazing ...

Zelithon: Yes, he beat her but he loved her. That is the basis of the idea - he 'cried' love, making it seem false and meaningless with his actions, but, ...

Hey, thanks for all your comments guys! I didn't expect such a good response! To Boni Bee, The line 'Now all he can do is stand and drown' actually carries ...

That's just so effortless. It feels really good to read.

OK, I'm not sure if this is in the right place, but I don't know where else to post it! If you have any suggestions, tell me! Featherweight I hold ...

I thought the beginning was really good, really effective. It didn't flow as well towards the end, but it certainly makes you think! It's nice to be made to see ...

The Boy Who Cried Love On a bench, so close together, They hardly notice the stormy weather. She turns and sees his open stare. Dare she believe she sees it ...

This I like a lot! It seems really natural. I think you shouldn't change it too much. The only thing I thought was that it was quite long, but that's ...

This is a great poem! It really captures something, an experience. I think the innocence is really key to the way it works. I love the line 'I like how ...

Today was not meant to take you away. Wow. That is a really powerful first line. Sad poem.