Lynlyn

Yeah, Zimmy! \m/ Rock on. There are a lot of things I like about this poem, but the main thing that's dragging it down is that a lot of the ...

I think Jab nailed most of the grammatical things I was going to mention. My remaining nitpick is in the first stanza: Did you know that your songs are empty ...

Ooh, neato. Loving the Alice reference. – thwock scribble scribble scribble siiiiigh scribble scribble whiiiir – help I'm not a big fan of the onomatopoeia - or, actually, the multiple ...

1) Sorry it took me so long to reply to this. I didn't want to review just after finishing my dinner. 2) In hindsight, that was a good call. :wink: ...

I actually thought the same thing about the candy. Maybe it's some sort of spell that creates the illusion of being covered in bugs and goo, when really it's not ...

This is an exciting piece! I really like the way you used the weather to set the mood. So just a few grammar things - I apologize if any of ...

This chapter is lonely... This is the third chapter, as there are two chapters and a prologue before - I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim ...

This is the third chapter (there are two chapters and a prologue before - I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none ...

Not really my style, but parts of this were pretty hysterical, I've got to admit. The main thing that bothered me was "okay" being condensed to "OK." I like the ...

I really like your story. I had a dream like this once, where I kept waking up over and over within the dream... except it was about kickball and not ...

This is Chapter 1 again, but i rewrote it. Oops. I think I posted on the old thread while you were posting this one. Some of my comments still apply, ...

Wow... reading through Prok's review, he nailed pretty much everything I was going to say. So I heartily second those suggestions. My suggestion for you as far as the it's/its ...

Niteowl's gifts are just getting better and better. I swear, when I joined a year ago, mine was only about three lines long. True story. Kids these days are so ...

I don't think cropping out the bushes would be the answer. I really like the different colors here, you did a really good job of including lots of different shades ...

Wow! What program did you make this in? I never make backgrounds in Photoshop because they take so long and they're so much work because of the size (especially when ...