Lynlyn

Heh, I have a terrible memory! I wish I could remember things easily. Anyway, I know I've seen you in chat and such, so it's good to know a little ...

All of the grammar errors that I noticed have already been pointed out. Your problem areas are few, but one to look at would be pacing. While well written, the ...

Very nice! The last line has left me wishing there was more... ah, wait, there is, I just have to finish critiquing this part so that I can go read ...

I love the way you do lips! They're so full and nice-looking! Your drawings are great, though the first one looks a little odd because her shoulders are a little ...

I have to agree. When you scan your drawings, try and mess with the settings a little until you can see all of the lines. As it is, I don't ...

The quote at the beginning is neat; I liked that. The beginning *could* be filed down a little bit, but I don't really see anything wrong with it the way ...

Hey, I'm I don't really have any nicknames so yeah...I'm new to this yeah whats up? Welcome to the site, Sara! I'm sure someone will give you a funny nickname ...

This is very cool. It does, however, read as a first chapter of something, and knowing that it's a stand-alone piece upsets me. I want to know what happens! She ...

I've never had someone critique my work before so please feel free to critique your hardest. Thanks. What a brave soul you are! I poked around for ages before I ...

My favorite part had to be when the kitten sneezed. So cuuuute. Your writing is, as usual, very exciting and well-paced. The only thing I really noticed was in the ...

Hey there, glad you could make it! I was so glad to stumble upon this site as well. It's really difficult to find sites like this, there aren't many of ...

Texas? I actually imagined it taking place in some dusty open western state, though... like Nevada or Montana or something. But I guess Texas is just as good of a ...

On the first chapter: One continuity error: he's looking at the sea, but it's smooth as glass? Yeah, the "smooth as glass" was supposed to be part of the dreamlike ...

Wooooow. I love love love. I can't wait to see this make it to full fruition so we can read the whole story. In the first chapter: She sank to ...

Rah! Face my +9 Red Pen of Editing--! ROFL! I want one, I want one! :D Anyway, welcome to the boards, Mileana! I looked to see if I could find ...