Lydia1995

How are they so wild and free? The wild horses of the sea. They rush across the white sands, their perfect hooves pummel the land. They flick their tails creating ...

Hello, Nice to meet you. This is what I found when reading your chapter the bits in red are my comments ok here goes... :) I put my earphones on, ...

Hello, I like the idea for the story although I thought it dragged a bit because of the every day mundane human stuff. My one major problem with it, is ...

I love the witty humour with moving cutlery and the cat. I only have one complaint, you described everything very well up until the end were you justa flung the ...

@Anna Yep you have it sussed, you will find out those thing s later as this was my intention though I may have to adapt this chapter because it appears ...

Wow I love it. WRITE PART 2!! It's great I love the way its written and everything one thing when in the chatroom someone says 'so' but you just put ...

I agree, I really think that you would be good at writing poetry because you have a very poetic way of writing and you use some very good words. You ...

Hello, I liked the way you built up the tension but I have to say that I was dissapointed. I don't know what you were on about at the end ...

Wow. That was really moving I love it. If you put it to a slow song it may even bring tears to your eyes. It reminds me of some lyrics ...

Wow. I really liked this it was great. Your clever way of having them both being exceptional artists could open up all sorts of possibilitys for turning this into a ...

I stood on wobbly feet and walked slowly. CRASH! I knocked over something that felt heavy. I didn’t see it coming, so I hit it head on (This could be ...

I really liked this well done, It was easy to tell that you were talking to a cat and the repetition with Emerald eyes was very good and made it ...

Hello all, I just thought that I would post this small amount of another book that I'm giving a go here. I would appreciate your feedback even if its just ...

@Grin Thanks for your feedback You question about why Lila is getting hung should become clear later, you are asking the very question I wanted the audience to ask. Thanks ...

I think that you should make something up that is original and yet not completely unrealistic. Your character already knows how to fight so how about them needing to learn ...