Lydia1995

Hello Dreamy, I liked this, and I actually can't see many things to tear apart with it. I would say though that this line, Perhaps someday in the future It ...

Alicia, "You are pathetic!" Ora said to me brandishing his finger in my face. "You need to learn English, no-one speaks the ancient language anymore!" I glared at him, "Mi ...

Cate, I could see problems with Thaniels plan too, but I couldn't think of anything better to do so I nodded. "It's the best plan we've got." I looked around. ...

Lila, We entered the town, I didn't like the look of it at all. It had a huge wall surrounding it and what on earth had happened to Tristan. Kaladore ...

Heather, I was surprised that Lacy was being nice to me, she had seemed so sour. But I was glad I was getting along with someone, it wasn't like I ...

Lila, I took the point with Kaladore again, after a very embarrassing conversation with Sam. Kaladore smiled at me. "Are you ok?" He asked. "Of course I am, I'm just ...

Hello, Welcome to YWS may I just say! :) So yes I think everything has been said really, please extended your story because I would like to know who these ...

Ok, so I took your advice and worked with it and here is the result :) Thanks to everyone who commented before, I would appreciate any further improvements. Prologue: I ...

Thank you everyone for your commments, I will go away, re-draft and re-post :)

Heather, "Dead!" I exclaimed, "but, how?" Rob shrugged, "Some kind of animal by the looks of the body." Lacy handed him a pile of laces. "Are we going to bury ...

Lila, I was grudgingly aware of the two boys disscussing nonsense and I brought my hand around to hit Kaladore lightly on the head. "Watch where you are going" I ...

Cate, The girl looked troubled, and she whispered in some strange language to the other inhabitant. He shook his head and turned back to us. We backed away back into ...

Hello! I liked this, well done :) I think you really portrayed the characters emotions and thoughts really well. And your rhythm was consistent thanks to the "a-blahblah." Your rhyme ...

Hello Percy, I'm Lydia and I will be your reviewer! Welcome to YWS :) Ok so firstly I would like to say that I noticed you didn't have any reviews ...

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