Lyddz101

This was a very good piece! I enjoyed the animal character, the style of writing, and the way his plan didn't exactly go perfectly but your MC manages to deal ...

I was also confused by the character shift, and assumed the mother and her child were Mel and her child, who I thought was the one who whimpered when the ...

I liked it! Other than one or two spelling errors I think I have a pretty good impression of the characters. The descriptions were good, both the ones about physical ...