LxnderSpeck

Here are the suggestions that you asked for, for part two: *"The room was rather a small house spelled so the inside was large enough for her to fit in ...

Hey Soul, as I promised last night here is my review, the first part goes for part one and part two as well: • Reminder- give features to your characters. ...

start off possitive I loved this. however, I would like way more description, way way more. I would love to see me and feel more and smell more and hear ...

(reminder, not really saying that you do it, but I can see the potential for the mistake later if not careful.) *When you are describing anyone/thing, make sure you do ...