Luvzi12

I honestly can't really nitpick this. The other commenters seem to have done that quite enough, but I felt that I had to comment because I really enjoyed it. For ...

Do you know you posted this twice:

Do you know you posted this twice:

Hi Evi :D It's funny you pointed out the "terrific happenings" line because that was the main reason I submitted the poem for crit hehe! Originally the line was "what ...

Bright lights and strong winds Terrific happenings A comet bomb lands at my feet A trace of blue amid the sleet A cloud of shine A beam of rain Amid ...

Well, I don't see how I story set in the past can't be historical fiction and that usually means sticking to the period with extensive research... so honestly I would ...

Hi! I'll start the nit-picking and give you my overall impressions at the end :D I had a co-ed name Co-ed? What is that? I thought that was short for ...

Aww no replies :( I wrote it when I was like 10 though when Pokemon was huge haha! So I guess I'm not too disheartened :P

I;ll keep this one brief, basically the rhythm and rhyme scheme didn't really work for me in lots of places. I like the couplets though, and the overall plot is ...

Oh, it's a shame the first wasn't yours, that was my favourite ha ha! Well I think you need a little bit of work on rhyme and rhythm, for example: ...

I liked this piece, you wrote it (as the first commenter stated) it was straight-forward and well-written. However, you lost me at the end. I sort of expected a lot ...

This is just a short one because it seems like your piece has been critiqued a lot. Chap. 1 Absently, I twirled the fork around and around until it created ...

nice to know I'm in the minority ha ha! I will be working :( Job AND dissertation and looking after family. *sigh*

"The Seven Basic Plots: Why We Tell Stories" by Christopher Booker, "The Secret Garden" by Frances Hodgson Burnett and "The Interpretation Of Murder"by Jed Rubenfeld. Yeah, I got bored reading ...

It wouldn't bother me at all, if anything it could make the character more interesting, as they seem flawed. No one likes a perfect character :P Like Carrie Bradshaw from ...