Lunasol21

Again, loveeeeeee the spinoff. The way you took the little parts of Lily and Severus's relationships from the book and turned it into this was great. The storyline is awesome, ...

Something about this poem is very hypnotizing... I can't quite figure out what, and that's what I love about it. You really have to dig in deep to find a ...

Love the imagery and use of words, it really puts the reader in your shoes. I especially love the line "The ice she treads is deadly thin". And I agree ...

Been quite down lately, it's a faithful poem, but I encourage those who are not to read. Not all Christians think the same way or feel the same way. Heck, ...

Perhaps we should not kiss tonight, Beneath the hazy silver light; Intoxicated by the fumes Of cigarettes and cheap perfume. The use of imagery here is simply beautiful. I can ...

As a big sister, this poem almost made me cry. I could find myself thinking about all the times I comforted my little sister when she was sick or was ...

It was not meant for me. It was not made of gold, or silver or wood. Crouched bitterly, you see? Hidden from your touch, your eyes if I could. Your ...

*has spaz attack and falls on floor* I LOOVVVEEE HARRY POTTER ~ Okay, I'm done. haha I really like it, but the grammar should be fixed (unless it is on ...

Madness is my favorite too, and the poems are separate.

A dismal foggy background flying past -- I am gliding. Air rushing through my fingertips -- I am flying. Adrenalin pulsing in my veins -- I am floating. Earth's rocky ...

The truth hurts more than the scars and burns I behold. The truth is a dagger that stabs at your heart when you feel pain. A controlling feeling that makes ...

Don't feel depressed! I write my most scary, twisted, depressing, and morbid poems when I am in the happiest of moods! I really like the short lines, because it creates ...

It's odd, but I like it. Perhaps if you edited it in the future, you would have a fantastic piece. Although, this seems like it belongs under Narrative Poetry...

I really like how you have written the poem and the rhythm you created. These lines are my favorite : "But the gifted crumple up the paper, throw it in ...

Like everyone else has said, superb use of imagery. No suggestions on my part, the rhythm and flow of the poem was amazing.!