Lunasol21

My goodness I love this poem. It's simplicity and language is great. The only suggestion I have is to revise some lines to help the flow and add some more ...

The cold is turning my breath to clouds, The sky is navy and without a single star, The harsh glow of the city Blocks the towers from view There was ...

Sometimes the absence of commas can hinder the flow rather than make it more evident, but for this poem that is not the case. I appreciate the deep cynical attitude ...

I love this poem and I love this title. End of story. It's not much of a review, but I look foward to reading more of your work. Happy writing!

My eyes are just two objects- Earths without a species and dirt without life, The light of (my? not sure if this would fit) consciousness injects. What would I do ...

The shortest lifespan Is not that of the fly - It's the second, Who must live so briefly. Flash by for a moment -Even shorter, I mean - An instant, ...

Before the dawn turns into dust And drifts away upon the breeze, Drink the morning's sweet sunlight - Taste the promise of this new day. Dance among the glades and ...

I cannot express to you how much I love the simplicity and language used in this poem. It really expresses so much in so little lines. I cannot find any ...

My shoes are stuck in the mud and I'm just sitting here, waiting for something extraordinary. But there's nothing at all - nothing but the spring sun poking through the ...

You sit outside, with a clipboard in your arms resting atop your knees. You are staring at a blank page of paper- there is nothing more terrifying I think you ...

The skies of my desires stretched across eternity, mock me as I stand an unmoving tree. Destined to gaze upon one day following another, a ghost merely wishing as time ...

*Tries not to seem like I'm stalking your profile* I love how short and simple this is. It voices the unvocalized heartaches of so many in so few words. Bravo ...

Okay, so in complete contrast of all those other people I really appreciated the poem. Poetry isn't meant to be spelled out and completely understood by anyone but the writer, ...

It's not much of a critique, but I really love this. I prefer shorter poems anyways, and this has so much meaning and emotion packed into a few lines. It ...

I don't really have any specific critiques for this, but I think all of these poems have great potential. I really like Paper Fox Hearts, even though it didn't make ...