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So proud of anyone who finished or participated in NaNo this year! You’re all such incredible writers and the ambition and passion is so wonderful! Keep up on all the amazing work. I may not have participated but I’m defrosting for NaPo :3

New lil lullaby on the forum: fit in

2016: 6 poems
2017: 12 poems
2018: 8 poems
2019: 27 poems
2020: 18 poems
2021: 38 poems
2022: 41 poems
2023: 49 poems and counting

This doesn't include NaPo poems from 2023, random documents full of random bits and pieces of poetry, or poetry I no longer have. I did delete a lot of poetry for personal reasons, but my collection is still growing and evolving.

I have loved poetry for so long, how could I ever stop?

I was reading @Liminality 's review of my poem Can Nature Be Haunted Too and decided to edit it a bit to make it a bit more of a cohesive work rather than the last two lines feeling a bit out of place given the context.
I primarily tweaked the ending.

The old:

I watch and listen to the somber
Symphony of tickling whispers,
And awaken to a moth stuck on the ledge
Waiting for me to sing it back to safety.

Can nature be haunted too,
Or just the places most sacred to us?

The new:

I watch and listen to the somber
Symphony of tickling familiar whispers,
And awaken to a moth stuck on the ledge.
Its stare sends shivers down my spine,
As I become aware I am being watched.
Can nature be haunted too,
Or just the places most sacred to us?

The purpose of the changes and meaning of the poem:
The last two lines inspired the entire poem. I was pondering on why it seemed only homes or buildings were haunted places. I wondered if places like meadows, or the animals/insects around us could be haunted too. I also wanted to tie in the idea of being personally haunted by past regrets, lost relationships, etc.
I added "familiar" to the line about listening to the ghosts to reference the narrators personal ghosts. This "dream" they have has people or events that haunt them. The moths in this poem represent an eerie figure in the "real world" that almost scares the narrator.
I also attempted to tie the two separated parts together with lines that emphasize the eerie emotion and perhaps fear the narrator feels. The moth being on the ledge scares the narrator because it is something watching them, similar to how ghosts seem to just watch.
I completely took out the line "waiting for me to sing it back to safety" because I don't believe it made sense. I think it felt like a pretty line so I included it but didn't think of the purpose it served.
Lastly, in the last line, "places most sacred" can refer to both a home or someone's mind, as the mind is something very personal. This can refer back to the dream the narrator has.

Overall, I know the poem is perhaps still not perfect but I did feel like changes were necessary and I am super appreciative of Liminality's review which gave me insight on what felt off about the poem. Hope these changes and my train of thought helped improve the experience of the poem!
I really do enjoy experimenting with darker moods and images and bringing those to life in my writing.
Much love ~ ♡

I think we admire the moon so much because it is the most peaceful way to appreciate the sunlight without the harshness of it all

I am really happy to be getting my degree in something I am passionate about but I am deeply scared as I have no idea what I want my career to be.

Yesterday, my boyfriend and I were walking through a public cemetery in his hometown, and there’s something poetic about all the fake flowers that cannot die accompanying the tombs and graves of those who have passed. Perhaps I’ll write about it.

The amount of Christ I see in my boyfriend makes my heart feel warm ♡

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Oh my!! I got on to wish everyone a Happy Thanksgiving just to see that I’m Featured Member!! Wow wow thank you everyone so much for all the support and comments. My heart feels so full!!! <33 you’re all wonderful and I’m so grateful

CONGRATSSSSS <333

Congrats on FM!!!!!

congrats on fm!

Congratulations, LULLABY!!!! So happy for you!! You make a wonderful featured member!!!