LukanRinta

Thank you for all your reveiws!! And I just want to say that I use the topic of love and marriage because I find that I'm drawn to it, and ...

Very cool. You made the reader clear on what was happening, but not straight away at the beginning. You took the time to develop full feelings for the main character, ...

It took me a few lines to get your rhythm down. And after that the poem was very entertaining. I understand why you put the commas in, though it seemed ...

Amazing. This actually gave me the chills. Very much reminded me of the subject of the book I just finished. Very coincidental lol. Now*rubs hands together* down to business. In ...

I liked the style, short and sweet, to the point. But it confused me. I know as the author you're going to blow me off because I said that(because I ...

The first time I read this, the numbers confused me. Then I realized they were to mark the lines and I read it over again. Your work here is truly ...

This was really cool. I like how you didn't have a rhyme, and you had what I call a rhythm for lack of a better word, but it was scattered ...

Love isn't real, can't be here to stay. I'm not ready for it to steal my heart and soul away. Still so young, yet you come running to me. So ...

You had me hooked from the first stanza. When I started reading it, I had music playing, but by the end of the second stanza I couldn't even hear it ...

sadly i am stuck in writing novels! psh, like im ever going to finish one of those, eh? nice work~ SJS Stuck writing novels? lol I know how that feels. ...

very cool :) Short but sweet. :) I've never seen Lord of the Rings though.

Aww. Please tell me if this is real or not. I have to know!!! Okay, down to business.(rolls up sleeves) This poem flows beautifully, I love how you rhym on ...

"Me: The awkwardness of first love, The confusion of new feelings. The scramble of trying to understand yourself... and your 'friend'. Dusty: Lukan... did you just say I'm your first ...

I agree with the other comments. Your wording and rhythm was great in the beginning, then you started rhyming. you began forcing yourself and thinking too much. I true poem ...

I'm still learning in this area myself, but I thought your rhythm was off. You had some lines rhyming, and others that didn't. I also saw that you attempted to ...