LukanRinta

Very good. You're repetition caught me from the first glance. Though I think it would help your flow and rhythm if you changed you wording around in a few lines... ...

This was great. A very deep and touching poem. This explains so well the pain that some people find that comes with loving someone who doesn't want to love you ...

This isn't the original version of the poem, but I personally think it's much better than the original... So enjoy and please comment!!

I Hurt To Love You He says he can't love me. So I lied with a shaky breath. "It's okay" I told him, my soul has faced its death. Painful ...

Wow. The ending was especially vivid and packed full of imagery and emotion. I loved the whole thing. This is the kind of writing that attracts me. I have to ...

This was very good. The first line was very unexpected, but that drew me to read the next line and so on. Great job! Keep writing! ~Lukan

I loved it. Though I could say maybe you should separate your stanzas and lines a bit better to help with the flow and rhythm(make it clearer to the reader). ...

I'm sorry for this not being so clear, but yes, it is a prologue. When I wrote it, I kinda scribbled it out, wondering if I should or shouldn't have ...

"Kayla! No!" I found myself screaming once again. "Kayla!" I tried again as I watched her summon her power. She lifted from the ground, arms at her sides. Her power ...

This was very very good. The only thing was that you had almost no punctuation except for question marks. That kinda threw off the rhythm, though I kinda put in ...

I loved how this was written. You have very consistent and capturing rhythm here from beginning to end. I like how you mixed up a few words from what we ...

This was very good. The prologue captured my attention, and you held it from beginning to end. You focused mainly on the boy in the prologue, so you'll have to ...

I really really want to give you a full review... but this left me so terribly speechless. I seriously teared up. No lie. People tell me I have talent... My ...

My teacher left a note at the bottom of my paper when he handed it back to me. This is what it said. Lukan, Your story ACTUALLY gave me the ...

This is something I wrote for school. I took it out of a piece of a larger story/novel I was writing, and made it fit the "occasion" that my teacher ...