LukanRinta

This was an extremely well written piece! I loved the rhythm and the idea of the bit. The imagery was strong and complete. Although I have a question: At the ...

This is really really old, like over a year, and is in pretty bad shape grammar and "proper" poetry-wise. I just thought I'd put it up here. I don't write ...

The tears are burning in my eyes. His words of wisdom. Do as he says? Say my goodbyes? Infatuation. Simply a father? My father's son? Adoration. No brother could be ...

I know it doesn't have imagery, it's not supposed to! True Love Prepare me. Show me. Love me. Hold me. This is why? So simple? Is this why? More complex? ...

Chills. Ice churns in my blood. Racing to my slowing heart. Fire. I convulse as it pounds. Can I deny it? Red. Sticky and hot, it gathers. A puddle of ...

I liked the idea and the theme a lot. And you did a great job setting the mood! I do have to point out that "refrigerated" is kind of and ...

It's been so long since I've heard your voice. Since I've felt your touch. I remember that fire, that finger of flame. That breath of smoke. So subtle a reminder. ...

Deep, deep, deep inside, I feel a beat I try to hide. It takes over me. Catch me a white dove, one glance and I fell in love. Haunted I ...

I completely love the idea here, but there were a few minor... issues I had in places. There were times where it was very repetative. For example, towards the beginning ...

Senseless Love. I feel it fly and fall about me, But is it really what I see? To me, it is not. But to them, to thee? This is a ...

The voices of angels breath through his lips. The roar of a lion resides in his chest. So pure is he, who sings with the birds, who runs with the ...

The imagery was abundant! In a good way, though. I loved the way you worded some of the lines. Like the last two lines. You drew the poem nicely to ...

Hi. Your poem was beautiful! It reminds me exactly how I felt when me and my boyfriend were going through a rough patch. Was it based on you? You need ...

I liked it a lot. You put a good amount of emotion into this small piece, but didn't overdo it. I did like the shortness though. The emotion was portrayed ...

I loved your imagery! The description of the rose, and the signifigance each characteristic played in the piece really drew the poem together! You had a strong first line, which ...