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Re: Bleed
Whisper to me, darling. Tell me your lies. Say you love me; look into my eyes. Surrealistic anguish keeps me alive. That light in the blackness helps me survive. I ...
Jan 19, 2012 -
Re: Addicted
You're only my drug, but I'm heavily addicted. This insanity; this love is not what I predicted. Like a hopeless drunkard yearning for wine. I'm dying of thirst, and you ...
Jan 19, 2012 -
Re: Storm
Pouring rain. Searing pain. A rushing river. A racking shiver. Storm warning. Still mourning. The rising flood. The dripping blood. Thunder groans. Another moan. The wind is screaming; My awareness ...
Jan 18, 2012 -
Re: A Year Disappeared
This is the first time I've posted anything like this... And the first time I've ever really written anything like this. It's for English class, but I decided to try ...
Nov 18, 2011 -
Re: Kill Me
I really liked this. Especially the ending. It went out strong, with a roar, and really had a lasting echo that rang out to me. My advice though, would be ...
Nov 8, 2011 -
Re: Goodbye My Love
So I'm not really sure I like this. It doesn't flow so great and it's kind of hard to follow. It kinda follows exactly what I was thinking at the ...
Aug 25, 2011 -
Re: Do not speak of love
For me, this piece really clicked. I find myself going through this exact same thing right now, so I could really connect to the poem. Your use of small, simple ...
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: Eleven:Eleven
No one believes the old wives tale That says your wish will come true, When the numbers on your clock Add up to six minus two. But when my friends ...
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: Fireflies and Lightning Bugs
WOW! This was absolutely amazing from start to finish! The first stanza caught my attention with the interesting yet perfect rhymes and the originality of the thought. Throughout you kept ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: On Your Knees
This poem is about 4 years old, and I realize it's not that good. I tried to get the easiest nitpicks out while typing it up :) Enjoy! I look ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Another
Another age; Another time. Another song; Another rhyme. Another man, Another dove. Another chance, Another love. A love so tender, A love so sweet. A love so potent, A love ...
Jun 17, 2011 -
Re: Lullaby
I like this better than the original song... Actually I love it. Usually I find spin-offs to be agonizingly simple or just way too different to truly be a spin-off, ...
Apr 10, 2011 -
Re: All Along
So I was right all along. I can't believe that it's all wrong. Like a sad and unfinished song. So I was right all along. Do you really truly care? ...
Apr 10, 2011 -
Re: Blood Red Moon
The flow is weird, but once you get used to it it's not so bad. I know it's a bit off, but I wrote it in only about ten minutes.. ...
Mar 24, 2011 -
Re: Connotations
I know that his makes absolutely no sense. It's sort of supposed to just be saying ways to set dark scenes, and different opportunities that could help with that. Yeah ...
Mar 20, 2011
