Lsmatthews

I like it. Was quite easy to read and it kept me interested. Just a couple of little nitpicks from me. "A solitary tear streaked down my face at the ...

I like this style of writing. Some people write first person pieces and put way to much descriptive detail into their sentences. I think you introduced well to your protagonist. ...

please go back and polish up your sentences. It seems like they are rushed and in some cases more could be said. Just flesh them out a bit moreand dont ...

Other people may not like this piece, but i can tell you that its almost like a manuscript of something that happened to me not too long ago. It really ...

Very very interesting. I like the style of you writing. Quite like Terry brooks whom i love to read. Im interested to learn more about these characters so i will ...

:) i like it. Well done. I think it would be more powerfull if you stated that it was a struggle. Something that cant be helped. For example maybe instead ...