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Re: The Assassination: Part 1
He'll be dead soon. I'd change the bold to 'He'd'. Tense issues. :) Very good way to open up a story, grabbed me from the start and held me through ...
Jan 5, 2008 -
Re: Hey There
Oh... and check out my contest! (look at my siggy) Ha ha, Azila. :) :smt039 Hi Michael! Welcome to YWS! I'm Dreamer (no, really?). So what type of stuff do ...
Jan 5, 2008 -
Re: Bella.
Congratulations, JC! You must be really excited. She looks really cute, and the quality is amazing (err... for the ultrasounds, I mean). But I'm sure Bella will have many fantastic ...
Jan 5, 2008 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [2]
9/10 I like the first one, don't get the second, and like the sound of the third one, even though I don't get that one, either... :D I think I ...
Jan 3, 2008 -
Re: Dreamer's going to college!
Break's over! All my classes are online again, due to the inconvenience of a not-California winter. Classes: English Sociology Introduction to Micro Computers Keyboarding (I still need the credit.) In
Jan 1, 2008 -
Re: How was your teenage life. Or life as a teenager so far.
Highly emotional. Add to this I'm the prodigy child who does and always will succeed in everything I do without the slightest chance of failure... You get a challenge. :D ...
Jan 1, 2008 -
Re: Lit Essay
Arthur Miller's Death of a Salesman and Edward Albee's The Sandbox both demonstrate, through the use of nonrealism and absurdity, the idea that steadfastly following the institutionalized conventions
Jan 1, 2008 -
Re: My Final Post
Derek, If you don't want to be here anymore because of the chat, that's up to you. However, YWS stands for Young Writers Society. Not Young Chatters Society. :wink: In ...
Jan 1, 2008 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [2]
10/10 Nice advertising. ;)
Jan 1, 2008 -
Re: Mark
I really liked how you used his name at the ending. I also liked how you started off the story with him as his current self looking back. It roped ...
Dec 31, 2007 -
Re: Emo (Revised)
Mad Hatter -- This is a major improvement upon the piece I read before. Instead of making me annoyed and frustrated, it opened my eyes somewhat. It now resembles a ...
Dec 28, 2007 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [2]
8/10 Sad...
Dec 27, 2007 -
Re: School of Crazy and Weird People
Kayla wobbled to her feet and blinked, looking around. Everybody else was shaking it off and getting up. Okay, that was... what was that? She shook her head and went ...
Dec 26, 2007 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [2]
8/10
Dec 26, 2007 -
Re: No Prince Charming
Rhyme scheme: a, a, b c, d, e f, f, g h, h, g This stanza sorta breaks the pattern: You aren’t my “Knight in shining armor, ” And I’m ...
Dec 24, 2007