LoveableLittleSock

Lite-shuttled light from above couldn't even - ... HUH? penetrate the darkness of our palms at that dirt-dirty crossing with not a nothing in sight. - dirt-dirty? Not a nothing? ...

The sky flashes Zeus’s golden lightning. Each bolt torments the testy rippling wave. - Oooh. Nice line. The blinding streamers burst streaks of whitening through space. Every teardrop falls as ...

Stars, see them high. And you. Get high. Off of them. Kings smile at you tonight- Down, on your tears, - I... don't follow Wiped with a gentle hand. Whisps ...

I had a little sister called May, She would cry for the whole day. - Replace 'whole' with entire Once her puppy laughed, She tore it in half, - SHE ...

Whispers proclaim The lasting sound, Of treetops swaying Like the ground, - Nice ryhme Beneath my feet That try to move, Much faster than The beating of, My cold and ...

I crept to the room slowly, a hesitant shadow, his arms outstretched, beckoning, a bloody indication, silent save the occasional gulp, - Put a comma after silent. eyes wide with ...

I sit, a Disney Princess coloring book on my lap. "Dear God... Once, I wanted to be a princess. Truly? I still do. Maybe you could lend me your shiny ...

I don't want the phone to ring again, I don't want to hear you knocking on my door, No more notes taped to my desk, I just can't take them ...

In the heart of a heartless night the black of the rain, or the grey of the wind, never chills her. - Oooh. To in rain, back in rain, colder ...

I just wanna say that the 'monster' thing is a metaphor. Does it not make sense? Teenager girls are horrible, yes?

Oh my god. I was so sad when the story ended. I kept searching the document, hoping it continued :( There were like, no errors in the whole thing. Just ...

SO... F******... SUSPENSEFUL. I could not tear my eyes away. The style you wrote in made the story easy and simple to read, therefore not confusing in the least. You ...

I re-read my review. I just want to tell you that I don't want to be mean. You do have a talent for writing! I'm not the best either, just ...

I read and edited everything. I have to say, it was quite... alright. How long have you been writing? This supernatural thing tends so be the subject amateur writers pursue. ...

Fly softly over my fields When you shake your feathers loose Sing slowly down Lilting On frozen air like slices of glass - nice stanza. Sit softly by my window ...