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Sorry, JC for not realising this was here :lol: I'll get on it immediately ;) xxx

June. xD I promised you I'd review this, and I am here ;) So, let's start on the very first poem... bearing in mind that I am terrible at reviewing ...

Personally, I think this poem would be really great if you made this the first stanza, then do a second not asking questions, but answering them, and maybe a third, ...

'Kay, I touched on a few grammar issues above, but most certainly not them all. You need to do that. Before posting on YWS I recommend you check your spelling ...

[quote]dont don't be afraid my dear comma Even if you're not going to capitalize all your first letters, you still need to capitalize some pronouns. Example: I i am here ...

I walked into the air- conditioned mall, already smelling the deep- fried corn dogs in the food court. I walked thru through the mall, it was loud from the chattering ...

Hey there, I'm Kirsten ;) What I loved about this poem was the flow. It flowed really well, and the rhyme wasn't forced either. xD The imagery was great in ...

Right, well this was the random piece of fiction at the top of the page, so even though it was ages ago that you posted this, and you probably don't ...

Hey Evi, I'm Kirsten ;) welcome to YWS :) You were the random piece at the top of the page, so I come faithfully to review ;) one I adored ...

Right, you were zee random piece at the top of the page, so here I am ;) Nit-picks first :( I treat people with hospitality, one Cleary saying "Welcome to ...

Hey there Hayley :P You were the random piece at the top, so here I am ;) Let's start with an analysis of your poem. xD If you think of ...

They are huge! Great photos too ;) My favourites are the first and the last. They're just so artistic and beautiful. They are big :shock: really big :O I agree ...

Hilarious *claps* absolutely genius :D I love you so much for this :D It was amazing. Hahahah I can't even comment 'cuz my stomach is sore from laughing *lols* crap ...

Hey, Explosive ;) I seem to be on a roll for random pieces of work that appear at the top of the screen as yours did, so let's start. xD ...

I missed out on another point I wanted to make: It's very hard to put the right grammar in your poem. Let's take the start for example: Depleted I am ...