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Re: Hunted (*Extended Version*)
Ok. I found a homophone mistake near the beginning with threw. It should be through, and in the second paragraph, I believe, there is a fairly confusing part. Id go ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: [Undecided title]
My Major Nitpicks: 1. " a million league " Im sorry, but please use correct plurals. It should read " a million leagues " 2. Please add more detail to ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: The Wizard's Thief - Contest Entry? (Part Two)
I moan slipped through my teeth as my side reprimanded me with a shock of pain. This is the only major problem I had. It should be A moan , ...
Jul 20, 2011