Lora

ummm....yes thank you for the crits. it is indeed a rough, so i will fix it accordingly. i am sorry if it wasn't as orginal as everyone would like it, ...

I really liked this very much! ...and everyone is right. it doesn't sound like a seven year old talking at all! so i agree with writingluver5, either change the age, ...

This was very good. i did feel like it was almost rushed, but i liked it anyways... just some typos here.... " He was stood behind me. " - should ...

i liked this quite alot. also claudette is right, the capital letters aren't right. but i really liked it other than that, it was great. muy bien! ---Lora

*this is my any comments would be appreciated! Gracias!* My Lifes Blood rushes past as the knife of this world cuts deeper, and deeper, into my soul. My heavy soul ...

*ha* yes... i really agree with Whence, except that i really did finish the 'poem.' i also agree with Claudette, Fand, and Snoik. please do not try and doesn't make ...

hmmm...i liked it very much. i just don't really like how the first stanza goes with the rest of the poem...maybe think about fixing it a bit. and Brad is ...

*sigh* it seems that everyone has said everything already. but that's ok, because...your poem had to much repition in why can't everything else? it's because it is a bit tiring ...

hmmmm....i can't relly get any emotion out of it. i don't think that the words really expressed it well enough for readers to understand. it is also a very broad ...

hmmmm....i had to read it once over again, but i think that i finally understood it. don't worry, i like to write short poems ot, especially if it makes sense ...

so...anyways...before all of this got just a bit off subject... i agree with Claudette and Whence. it was all very good, except that i to really didn't understand much of ...

Yeah, this was my first time reading anything of yours! it was really great, though i'm not the best poem writer, so don't take anything to seriously! i like the ...

wow...that was really great!...i don't actually know what to say to that really...i think i'm still speechless! but no, really. Kitty15, is once again flowed great together, and all that ...

Muy Bien! me encanta tu 'poem' (not sure how to say it in spanish!) Anyways i really liked how it flowed off the tongue while reading it. i also liked ...

I really liked this. for the first chapter the info was thrown in there, but i liked it anyways. i really think that you should continue writing this peice. i ...