Liz

Pretty good. Original idea, and you used an interesting, somewhat narrative tone. There are some inconsistencies I'd fix up. You need to make it clear whose perspective you're writing from ...

Ugh... I had faith. I'm probably too much of an optimist. It's good to see lots of French people still have spirit and they're protesting so strongly. I've always loved ...

Well, I have to tell you I've spent the last couple of days reading this novel on and off. And it has impressed me throughout. You really know how to ...

this is how I used to be – writing in longhand, being present only because I wasn’t absent, wishing for remission, not quite getting there. it reminds me of the ...

Quite nice. I like your tone, and you kept it consistent throughout the whole piece. Very strong concept too. I think you could reconsider your linebreaks to make it stronger. ...

Very nice. I'm glad you've used your capitalisation effectively in this piece; it makes all the difference. Just some small things like spelling you need to fix up, eg: Going ...

I liked this. It seemed sort of monotonous, and it read like a letter or something. Maybe you want to try some more rhythm or imagery? I also think you ...

Hmm...wow, that made me think. Good stuff. Good tone, but I agree with Snoink that you may want to rethink how the 1st stanza is written. I think you could ...

I like this, but I don't know why you capitalise the first letter of every word, it makes it difficult to read. It also seemed sort of disjointed. Many of ...

Nice idea, although I think it lacks power. The rhyming is okay, but sometimes it gets a little forced. It definitely flows well. It's probably nice as it is, but ...

Not bad. Your rhythm does seem to be a little off - maybe get rid of the rhyming or work out a scheme you want to stick with. I think ...

Overall I really enjoyed this. The emotion in here is powerful and you convey it effectively to the reader. Rhyme was a bit off in certain parts like piepiemann22 pointed ...

Quite nice. The general idea is in many ways outworn, so I think you need a bit more spark to pull it off. You've got a nice tone, and I ...

9/10 Beautiful picture, it makes me hopeful.

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