Liz

It's Friday and a chunk of golden chicken drips, cook-marks sizzling on the bottom of melted crumbs shining in the fake light of your unnatural landscape. Today it was a ...

echo clinks of water on chains of concrete forming slivers of the false world false world which can't sing you in your silver shoes with the silver rain leaving metallic ...

good. i like the concept, and it was reasonably well-written. i also like the dark tone of it, but i think you could have added more. as it's a true ...

overall, i really like it. the simplicity gives it something special whilst still suggesting deeper emotions and thoughts. great imagery, it flowed quite well, but i agree, without the "and"s ...

i like this. perhaps a bit too simple, but you have a good concept and it was well-written.

i really like this, especially the tone. you're right, it is very stream-of-conscious, which can be hard to pull off. that I could for one brief moment still the axis ...

Well-written. There isn't much so far for me to judge, but I do like it.

wow, very nice. i love the tone of this, and yeah, it flowed beautifully. meaningful and appealing to the senses. nice one :)

to gouge this grainy wind which walks so free, (proving life's existence with no intermittance) would be so icily cruel, like the bladed sun which shakes and breaks the gossamer ...

Last night the rain was whispering on your cheap, leaking roof with the unstable tiles, and you and your cigarette were whispering against my neck. I could feel your hot ...