Liz

1. Writing on desks. 2. Vegemite & peanut butter on pancakes (seperately)...you should try it! oh, but some of you poor americans don't have vegemite...I feel sorry for you! 3. ...

Yeah, that's me :) Thanks for the comments guys.

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Aw everyone's hot!

you don't deserve glittering french and vintage hugs. neither do i, but the way your satchelbag, highheel mass of pretention seeps and leaks into all of our postcards makes my ...

You really need to expand, just to make the concept clearer. Not bad though.

Really good. The best part about this poem was the tone, you really pulled off a constant one. Galatea's right though: "disseminating" disrupted it. It's a cool word, but doesn't ...

Cool idea. That's pretty much all it is. The last line is nice. ohhewwo's right: you need an adjective in front of the angel, otherwise the flow is broken. It ...

Ah, I liked the time and sand part. Nice poem, I liked the concept. What you need to do though, is take out some of those commas. I remember the ...

Thanks guys. Dreami: don't worry, I don't think you're being too critical! I like constructive criticism, it really helps. The thing is, my poetry makes complete sense to me and ...

This is beautiful. Everything is expressed really well, and I love the concept. Just to find something wrong...the second stanza's line-breaks could be re-thought. They just don't fit that well ...

Tsk, tsk. Nice one, Brad.

Where do I start? Nickelpickle is right. I see you standing in a crowd my heart beats faster as you turn around you give me a smile i want to ...

Yeah, try to be more subtle. Also, your similes and images are more like cliches. Her eyes, blue so bright Her hair is brown, soft as silk Her clothes shimmer ...

The night which dives onto all of the pavements, grass, eyelashes, runs into the glass of my bedroom window and seeps through it. I feel cold underneath my creamy blue ...