Liz

Communism is really only an ideal. It can't work simply because of humanity.

Tell me honestly everyone, what do you think of Australia? Lately I've become ashamed to be one, because I can just see what people overseas must think of us. Our ...

I like it. The only problem was that it didn't seem to be too original. When the boy is talking at the end, it gets a bit obvious. Try and ...

I don't think it's bad at all! I really enjoyed it, you have a great plot and it's very well-written. The only problem I think, is that you occassionally use ...

I like this, but I think it could be even better if you expanded on it and worked it into a story. It's not the most original of ideas - ...

What's worse ... now there's an Australian Idol an we get both!!! No!!! The horror!!! We're all doomed to melt in front of the TV!!! It's just anouther example of ...

you leave me swimming in my own scattering confusion with your tanned waterfall of words i have been slipping on your melting red ice for pages and pages of days ...

This is really good. I think it dragged on for a bit too long, but overall it was extremely well-written. Good job.

Packed to the brim with cliches! Try to be more original.

I like it...but it does seem a bit bland.

emotion_less: No, it's not obvious at all! Basically I have 13 poems for each day before I went to France last year. Each one reflects what was going on that ...

Yeah, definitely expand it and you'll have a really interesting piece.

I really like it. However, there are some grammatical errors and stuff that makes it really confusing to read. You switched back and forth between the mum and dad being ...

Great, I really like the concept, it's really understandable. It was well-written, very original. What Nate pointed out in the second stanza would really help to be fixed up, but ...

Sylvia Plath and e.e.cummings because they've both paved the way for other poets with similar styles. Love their work but I try to keep theirs and mine seperate as if ...